Discussion Board 2

Read the following two passages exerted from “Faces of Learning” and “Young and Isolated” respectively, and then articulate what you think about one of the questions below.

Faces of Learning – Maritza Brito

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New York Times Piece – Young and Isolated

“Lowell and Richmond embody many of the structural forces, like deindustrialization and declining blue-collar jobs, that frame working-class young people’s attempts to come of age in America today. The economic hardships of these men and women, both white and black, have been well documented. But often overlooked are what the sociologists Richard Sennett and Jonathan Cobb in 1972 called their “hidden injuries” — the difficult-to-measure social costs borne by working-class youths as they struggle to forge stable and meaningful adult lives.”

  • Q1: What do you notice about each author’s word choice?
  • Q2: What kind of voice and point of view are used?
  • Q3: How does the style of each source relate to its audience and purpose?
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20 Responses to Discussion Board 2

  1. bohdantr says:

    Brito uses relatively simple, familiar words. She also uses personal pronouns and colloquial terms: “slacker” and “lazy”. These make the passage easily read and personal. By contrast, Silva uses more complex, academic phrasing and words. “Structural forces”, “deindustrialization”, and “hidden injuries” refer to concepts that require more intellectual and focused reading to make sense of than can be found in “Faces of learning. The word choices of each author indicate intended audience: Brito’s writing is accessible to school-age children while Silva’s targets adults.

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  2. wpaden says:

    The style of both these passages are very different from each other. While Maritza Brito (Faces of Learning) has more of a casual/informal style of writing, Jennifer Silva (Young and Isolated) has a very formal style of writing considering that it is an article published by the New York Times. When compared, the first passage relays some type of a message to the young audience based on the author’s own experiences as a young student, whereas the second one is aimed more towards adults as it discusses the “hidden injuries” or the struggles, working class people face and these issues need to be exposed to a more mature audience.

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  3. rnreagan says:

    In response to question 3, the first author’s intended audience is clearly different than the second author’s intended audience. The first author uses a much more informal tone and connects her thoughts to personal experiences. Her purpose of writing seems to be to inspire students to take initiative and reach out to teachers to possibly recreate the support that she feels she received in their own way. The second author is writing to a larger audience in a more informative way. There is no personal information disclosed and it is more difficult to follow than the first. Their purpose of writing appears to be to point out the fact that the working class youths have difficulty with creating a stable life. Both authors are writing to bring attention to a fault in education or society, but using different styles to cater to their audiences.

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  4. jasonkimik says:

    Styles used in the first passage and the second passage greatly differ. While the first passage is written casually, the later one is written more academically by quoting professionals’ words. This happened as they don’t share the same purpose or audience. The second one was written for the New York Times to introduce a social phenomenon, which was often overlooked to audiences, who is educated well enough to understand much harder vocabularies used than vocabularies of the second ; however, the first one focuses on telling audiences his or her own experience in everyday words, no matter who they are capable of.

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  5. teanchen says:

    I think question 1 and question 2 can be related, because word choice could affect the style and the tone of the article. Also, it could attract different audience. Maritza Brito used simple words to frame his sentences, which made it easier to understand and simply connects to the audience. However, the New York Time Piece used words that are more formal and professional, which was more complicated to understand. There are two purposes of why the authors used different style for an article. One of them is because different style can connect to different ages of audience, and two is because an article from a newspaper or a magazine often needs to be in formal writing

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  6. ejmeyer says:

    The two passages differ from each other largely in each author’s style. Maritza Brito, writes with smaller more casual words; referring to herself as lazy and short phrasing of sentences. This makes the passage manageable to read and it feels as though she is talking us. Writing like this can appeal to a larger audience and also hint at her “lazy” side by not focusing so much on developing long detailed sentences but more on telling the reader what happened. In the second passage, the author is first not telling their own story but commenting on other’s and their struggles with being apart of the working class. In the article “Young and Isolated”, it feels more like an adventure through each individual’s life and it has a more dark feeling. Though both articles contrast with each other, each captures their respected audiences.

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  7. tommydang says:

    The voice and point of view in the faces of learning and New York Times piece differ in that the voice in the faces of learning seems more relaxed like it’s trying to tell a story. You can imagine reading the article in a teacher’s tone or a close relative. The voice in the New York Times seem to be more of a serious tone used to inform readers about the problems in society. Like something you would hear from a government official. The Point of view also differs in the fact that in the faces of learning, the author is using “I” and “me” which shows that the author is using a first person point of view. The author in the New York TImes piece, uses a third person point of view, using words such as “These men and women” and “They”.

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  8. tgmeehan says:

    These two passages differ for many reasons. The word choice in the excerpt from Brito’s “Faces of Learning” was much more informal than from the New York Times Article which used more elevated vocabulary and more professional set up. The voice from the Faces of learning excerpt was much more casual and told from experiences from the point of view of the writer. However the “young and isolated” article is more professional and tells you the direct struggle from an outside point of view. Each article has its own methods of relating to the reader. Brito relates easily to the reader because she opens up an experience of her life that was special to her because of an inspirational teacher, which is a very relatable experience. The New York Times article stressed the difficulties for the common people in society to “forge stable and meaningful adult lives” and this struggle is something everybody in the working class has dealt with.

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  9. junhyeoperic says:

    I would like to pick question 2, that is about kind of voice and point of view are used in those two paragraphs. First of all, the voice the first paragraph is sort of light, easy to read and something that I can just read it simply that doesn’t mean this story is something that doesn’t even have a point or learn from it. This paragraph is something you can just read over it, understand better in easy way. However the second paragraph is more formal written paper, I don’t know if it is because of my poor vocabulary, I had to read closely and several time to understand this paragraph well. second the point of view is kind of obvious to see, first one is saying about what the writer experienced, and what he felt. Next paragraph is something from other person is looking up this topic and wrote about it in his view not the one that he is in that part. I think that is the difference between those two paragraph in voice and point of view.

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  10. I noticed that the choice of grammar used by Brito is slightly more informal than that of the New York Times. Brito wrote his piece by using his personal experiences in life, especially the times when it was difficult for him to get back on the right track. Brito wrote it using this style because there are other students that are in similar situations, therefore he wrote this piece in order for other people to connect with his problems. The New York Times however, was written in a way so that the public can understand the situation at hand. They took information that would normally be overlooked by the public and wrote it in a simple way so that we can understand what is currently happening.

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  11. The style of the first source is very casual and personal, writing about Brito’s personal experience she had with her teacher, while the second source mainly discuss real facts supporting the author’s main point. The style of the first source comes natural or easy to the readers as if they are hearing the story from the author herself. Rather than stating concrete facts or reliable information, she shares her very personal story to connect to the reader, which helps connect to the readers easier. The second source of the New York Times is assertive in a way to achieve its goal of convincing the readers. It states concrete facts to back up her opinion about a problem. Though it may not come as natural as the first source, by writing reliable source such as “the sociologists Richard Sennett and Jonathan Cobb in 1972 called their “hidden injuries”” makes the article sound more logical to the readers.

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  12. dershent says:

    After reading both article and contrasting them. I found that Maritza Brito in the ‘faces of learning’ took on a more active voice, in which she emphasise on main character in her story that is Mr. Jackson and she herself. She also goes into a lot of tiny details in her story about her life to make the story more interesting. The New York Times pieces – Young and Isolated took on a more passive voice. Writing the stories from a broader perspective and encompassing larger group of people with their similar personal stories. That also lead to Maritza Brito writing to be more from a personal point of view, entailing her personal experience and memory of her idol and mentor in her life. While Jennifer M.Silva writes from a third person point of view, trying to pursue a goal in persuading her readers to change their view or even enlighten them about the issue in society, hoping to help improve the lives of the many young adults affected.

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  13. Both authors have a clearly intended audience. Brito uses very simple words that everyone can understand. He is directing towards a less educated audience. Brito uses very informal words to try to attract that audience. His laid back use of words might make it easier and more relatable for the less educated audience. In contrast Silva is coming from that of an educated point of view. He is appealing to the of a well educated audience by using more complex words that would take more education to understand. Not everyone can read his passage and I understand every word.

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  14. gunhoko says:

    The two passages have very contrasting choice of words. In “Faces of Learning,” Brito uses words that are rather informal and that may be used in dialogues. The passage is very easy to read as if the author is telling a story to others. The other passage “Young and Isolated” was written by the New York Times, whose writings are mostly written in formal style. The choice of words used for this passage is informative and academic. The author also uses citations from academic works – making the passage more formal.

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  15. gregkim360 says:

    1. The 2 authors in each article have very different tones/choice of words. In “Faces of Learning”, Brito is more informal and uses more common words we use in our everyday lives such as “slacker” and “lazy”. This article is simple to understand and straight forward. Silva, however, uses more complicated terms and an overall more complicated tone. This is probably intended because its the New York Times and it is intended for mature audiences.

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  16. Danielle Kim says:

    Both of these passages are different in the way that in “Faces of Learning”, Maritza Brito targets more of a general audience, whereas in “Young and isolated”, the author comes off in a more professional matter, and is geared towards addressing an issue to possibly a higher figure. Brito’s article flows and can be perceived as causal writing, her writing structure is every simple and straight to the point. She uses sentences such as “i was a slacker..i was lazy in class” Compared to the New york times article, where things are more carefully put together, this author differs in that their writing contains more euphemisms, like the word “hidden injuries”.

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  17. djlee7 says:

    There is a style difference between two passages. The first passage is written in informal. Brito used many informal and easy words so that readers understand easily. These makes passage very accessbile to the general public. This passage will give the writeer’s idea to readers abroad easier becasue of it’s accessibility. However, the other passage is written in formal. The New York Piece used words that professional and informative. This passage use “They” and “these men and women” and it shows that writer views the problem form outside which is totaaly different from Brito’s style of writing. It will help to educate readerse who can read well.

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  18. gjalmont says:

    Both passages are written in a specific way through their style of writing. Through the author’s styles the passages have different tones. Authors often write differently based on the purpose of their writing and the audience. The first passage, written by Maritza Brito, holds a more informal tone. Brito’s purpose in this passage is to share her own personal experience and express what she learned from it. With that in mind, she wrote informally and in a way that is easier to read and understand what she has to say. Brito used this style to successfully share a powerful experience she had concerning school. However, the second passage takes a different approach. Jennifer Silva wrote this passage for the New York Times, so it makes sense that the passage was written in a more professional tone. Silva did not write to share an experience but instead to inform and share a point. So based on the audience and goal, Silva wrote in this formal style to tell the audience about the younger generation’s economic struggle and struggle in the work force.

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  19. aidanobr says:

    each author has distinctly different word choice. Brito on one hand talks very informally almost as if it were a conversation between friends. Brito used words such as slacker and lazy and the read all together was rather easy. Brito was very straightforward both in her intentions and word choice. The purpose was a simple retelling of a personal annectdote which is simple yet powerful. contrasting to Brito’s piece was Jennifer Silva’s. this author was very formal and much more selective in its word choice. a big reason for this difference can probably understood in the terms of the source. Jennifer Silvas piece came from the New York Times and is why the papers style had to be so formal. you can see how the style also differs in the word choice of the author. Silva uses words such a industrialization and phrases like “hidden injuries”. this piece all together wasn’t a particullary hard read, but definitely had a deeper meaning to it and asked more of the reader than the first piece in many aspects.

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  20. Both style of each source relate to its audience and purpose are very different. the first author Maritza Brito uses simple word and simple to understand especially for those people who speak English a little bit. Also , it is easy to remember the text and to summarize it in your our own thought. That is the importance of using simple word. However, the second article “Young and Isolated” is more complex and formal writing because the author uses a direct quotation by saying according to the sociologists.

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